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Re: A story I wrote.
« Reply #45 on: December 30, 2008, 02:06:54 AM »

The story was TL;DR.  Give a reason in no less than 3 and no more than 5 words why I should read it and give a full on, critical review.
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Re: A story I wrote.
« Reply #46 on: December 30, 2008, 02:09:19 AM »

Your seething hatred is amusing.
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Re: A story I wrote.
« Reply #47 on: December 30, 2008, 02:14:21 AM »

It's ripe for the slaughter.
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Re: A story I wrote.
« Reply #48 on: December 30, 2008, 04:30:01 PM »

For the purpose of banter.
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Re: A story I wrote.
« Reply #49 on: December 30, 2008, 05:02:08 PM »

For the Greater Good.
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Re: A story I wrote.
« Reply #50 on: January 04, 2009, 04:54:20 AM »

The story was TL;DR.  Give a reason in no less than 3 and no more than 5 words why I should read it and give a full on, critical review.

It's a second draft.
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Re: A story I wrote.
« Reply #51 on: January 04, 2009, 10:40:52 AM »

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Don't take this the wrong way, but seriously, if this is your second draft, you have no hope as a writer. I'm not saying this to be mean, you just have no talent for it at all.
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Re: A story I wrote.
« Reply #52 on: January 04, 2009, 10:42:48 AM »

Is anyone else still reminded of Full Life Consequences?

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